On Thursday 30th July The whole LH1 went to Auckland Zoo.My Dad came as a parent helper too.There was lots of cool animal like Zebras and Tasmanin Devils. My favourite animal is the merecat's because there small and cute.My favourite thing was the merecat's tunnel.I also liked the Girrafes because I like the colour yellow.In my group I had Me , Neha , Aleena , Harry , William , Alysia and Sadeen. It was really fun at the zoo with my group and my dad.
Ash
Justin V
ReplyDeleteIt's very good that you talked about what you did
If you can make it longer you can make it more interesting
Good thing that you said something about what your group is
Ash
To: Ash
ReplyDeleteYou have good skills
Maybe try and look at the spelling mistake for meerkat
I really like it
ash you have a lovely blog you set it so nice
ReplyDeletemaybe some more ditails
what is a wiata
to ash
from komal
To: Ash
ReplyDeleteYou have good skills
Maybe try and look at the spelling mistake for meerkat
I really like it
I liked the tiger because it likes to sleep under the trees
ReplyDeleteto ashmira i really liked your blog when you told us your favourite thing i have no questions from-christian
ReplyDeleteMy favourite animal is the cheetah because it looks sleepy
ReplyDeletei liked reading your blog it was almost like johannah's i don't know why? but i still liked it
ReplyDeleteAshmira,
ReplyDeleteYou've had some good feedback already. I enjoyed your post and glad you enjoyed the zoo trip BUT I expect more detail from you! I hope that your next post is a) longer with more emotive/descriptive language and b)more detailed. Great job at the Google Summit - I was very proud of you, your resilience and confidence and I am looking forward to your post all about the exciting day at HPPS.
Ms W
To Ash
ReplyDeletegood job this really good. you made such a long story into a very small story.
I think you need to work on having a little more info about your trip.
good job
From Imran